http://friendshipbeam.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] friendshipbeam.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sunrises 2008-05-29 02:31 am (UTC)

This is pretty interesting. ^^ Sometimes the writing was a little repetitive (ex. Standing in front of the girl, Max attempted to say that the conductor was a lunatic. "That.... girl... is... a... lunatic..."), but overall, the descriptions were good and the characters are fine. I like it. ^^

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